Ask me about the weather. “It’s fine”, I’ll say. Perhaps I won’t tell you how the sun breaks through my window in a thin line between the curtains that I always forget to close properly. I won't tell you how that first ray of light in the morning hits me and cuts through my skin. And don’t get me wrong, I can still feel the heat of summer and marvel at the purple’s palette in the sky, right after the sunset. Ask me about the weather. “It’s getting a bit colder”, I’ll say. I may want to tell you about the trees. The new sounds they’re making because of the wind and how I want those sounds to be louder. Louder enough to silence the thoughts in my mind, the stares of frightened people inside their houses. Ask me about the weather. I’ll say some days are sunnier than the others. I may even tell you summer is lasting longer. But ants know better. I’m watching them on my window frame, picking up food, getting ready for ...
The first line nicely establishes the couple's relationship, and the difference in their signatures was an effective way to show the reader how they feel about the split. We had very similar ideas!
ResponderEliminarThanks Nate! I know!!! I wrote my Kimo on my blog and when I opened the grid I saw DIVORCE and thought: no way! haha what were the odds?
EliminarThis was really well done. I have read it through several times now and my mind lingers on a different word or line each time.
ResponderEliminarWow, thanks!! It was a real challenge for me to make this form of poetry. So happy to know you liked it.
EliminarWhat a way with words. Enjoyed reading this kimo.
ResponderEliminarThanks, Ruby! For reading and commenting.
EliminarI really enjoyed this piece - it's so vivid and you convey so many emotions through the objects that are present or absent
ResponderEliminarThank you Sanch, I really appreciate your comments!
EliminarThe imagery is so crisp and it captures the moment perfectly.
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